Wednesday, September 19, 2012

Write Right: 5 Reasons Why Said is Best


Beginning writers often overlook the power of 'said' because they feel it is boring. But said is actually a very important tool for a writer!

Here are some of the reasons why you should use said.





Reason #1: Said is Invisible

I know that as a beginning writer you want to vary the words you use. That's good writing, right? Yes, but when it comes to speech tags, said is best.

"But said is boring! It's too repetitive if I use it all the time!" The writers doth protest!

But you see, the wondrous thing about said is that it is invisible. Think about it. When you read a book, do you notice every time the author uses said and think, "Gee, this is getting really repetitive, I wish she'd toss out some more colorful words instead."

Of course you don't! Now think about this: When you're reading a book, do you notice when the author uses a word other than said--barked, queried, interjected, snapped, smirked, growled, scoffed?

These probably jump out at you a little more. They call attention to themselves, and distract from the dialogue and the story. As a writer, you never want to do something that will shatter the illusion you're trying to create and pull your reader out of their fictional dream.


Reason #2: Said Doesn't Shatter the Fictional Dream

It is far better to use an invisible word like said that won't call attention to itself than a more colorful speech tag like barked, sneered, grunted, etc. Some speech tags that I come across while reading actually make me cringe. The top worst offenders are: intoned, implored, speculated, surmised, and queried.

Please, I beg of you, do not use these in your writing! Use said or asked instead. Using words like these won't make you sound smart--they just jar the reader with their weirdness and make you look like you're trying too hard.  

When a writer uses words other than said it makes me feel like the writer is calling attention to herself, waving her arms and shouting, "Look at me!"

Writers, take note: You never want to call attention to yourself in your writing. You want to remain invisible. You want to impress your readers with your story, not your writing.


Reason #3: Said Avoids Redundancy

If you think about it, most speech tags are unnecessary and redundant. Consider these:

"Be careful," he cautioned.
"I don't know why he hasn't called," she fretted.
"You shouldn't tease her," she chided.
"I told you to do that ages ago," he nagged.

Now let's take away the descriptive speech tags and replaced them with said:

"Be careful," he said.
"I don't know why he hasn't called," she said.
"You shouldn't tease her," she said.
"I told you to do that ages ago," he said.

Notice how you can still tell that these people are cautioning,  fretting, chiding, and nagging by their words alone without the speech tags. The reader doesn't need the descriptive speech tag to tell him/her what the character is doing. Your character's words should be explanation enough.

The character's actions will also clue the reader in to what the character is doing/feeling. For example:

She paced the room, wringing her dress. "I don't know why he hasn't called," she said.

It's clear from the character's actions and words that she is worried. The speech tag 'fretted' is not only unnecessary, but it is redundant--it's telling us something we already know.

Remember the rule "show don't tell?" This applies to speech tags, too. Don't tell us that your character is chiding, nagging, etc. Show us.

I suppose one could argue that said is redundant as well, (isn't it obvious that the characters are speaking?), but you have to use some form of speech tag to let the readers know who is saying what.

And the speech tag you are going to use is said, right? ;]


Reason #4: People Say Things

If you think about it, using some of those more descriptive speech tags doesn't even make sense (and sounds kind of silly). Can you actually physically gulp, sigh, bark, snarl, or sneer out your words?

Er...no.

People (and your characters) say things. They don't snarl them, sob them, or laugh them.

My rule I go by in my writing is that I don't use any speech tag that isn't physically possible. Besides said and ask, the only other speech tags I use are: whispered, mumbled, muttered, grumbled, shouted, yelled, and screamed.

These are the words I use that I have found aren't too redundant, are harder to imply through words/actions, are simple, and are physically possible. (And honestly, it makes it a lot simpler using these rather than wasting time hunting for a 'perfect' unnecessarily descriptive speech tag).


Reason #5: Using Said Makes You Look More Professional

If none of the above reasons have convinced you why you should use said, then maybe this one will. Using said makes your writing look cleaner and more professional. No writer wants to look like an amateur. And every writer wants their writing to be at its best when they send their story out to a publisher!

Getting published is tough--don't give a publisher another reason to toss your story into the 'reject' pile.


That's What She Said

Alright, so there you have it--5 very good reasons why you should use said in your writing. That's all I have to say about said, so go put it to practice! Start replacing all those descriptive speech tags with said and you'll realize just how power such a small, simple word can be. And like me, you'll probably fall in love with said.

Happy Writing!

Tuesday, September 18, 2012

Top Ten Bookish People I Want To Meet (TTT 8)

 Top Ten Tuesday is a meme hosted by The Broke and the Bookish. This week's theme is...







Top Ten Bookish People I Want To Meet


1. J.K. Rowling
It's J.K. freaking Rowling!! Need I say more?


2. C.S. Lewis
Ok so I can't technically meet him since he's not living, but maybe if I find a way to make a time machine... lol.
"There is too little of what we like in stories, I am afraid we shall have to write some ourselves." C.S. Lewis is my inspiration as a writer. Plus, the man was a genius.


3. Cassandra Clare
I love Cassandra Clare's books, and I would love to be able to chat with her about characters! Her characters are amazing! Especially Jace and Will *double swoon*


4. Maggie Steifvater
I'm in love with the way she writes. Plus she seems like a fun person :]


5. James Bell Scott
Author of Plot & Structure, a book on writing that I have found immensely helpful for improving my own work in progress. I would love to shake that man's hand and say thank you!


6. Ted Dekker
Ted Dekker writes adult Christian thrillers, and boy does he come up with some strange things! There's no telling what goes on inside his head. I'd love to ask him about his books :]


7. Cornelia Funke
I fell in love with Cornelia Funke's Inkheart books, and with her awesome imagination I think she'd be a really cool person to meet.


8. Jeff Gerke
Back when I was just beginning my writer's journey, I came across Jeff's weekly writing tip column. It was so incredibly helpful to me and really improved my writing (plus, his sense of humor made them fun to read). I'd love to thank him for helping me grow as a writer.
 

9. Wayne Thomas Batson
A Christian YA/MG Fantasy author, I really loved his books! Plus, he's also a middle school teacher which is what I'm going to become, so I'd love to ask him how he balances teaching and writing. 


10. GOD ;]
Of course I would want to meet the author of the world's most best-selling book ever! haha ;]


What were your top ten?

Happy reading!



Monday, September 17, 2012

Review: Changeling by Philipa Gregory

Title: Changeling
Author: Leigh Bardugo
Pages: 256
Publisher: Simon Pulse
Series: Order of Darkness #1
Released: May 24, 2012

 













The Story

 "We have been commanded by Pope Nicholas V to explore the mysteries, the heresies and the sins, to explaoin them where possible, and defeat them where we can. We are making a map of the fears of the world...The Holy Father knows that we are approaching the end of days." (p. 11)
In 15th century Italy, Luca is accused of heresy and expelled from his monastery. Luca comes into the service of a mysterious man, who asks him to record the end times and travel across Europe to map the fears of Christendom.

During his inquisition at a nunnery he meets Isolde, the Lady Abbess who was been manipulated out of her inheritance by her brother. The nuns seem to be going mad--having visions and sleep walking, and strange wounds appear on their hands. As Luca investigates, all evidence seems to point to Isolde as the culprit.


Our Hero: Luca

 "One of the men raised his torch so the light fell on the slight dark-haired youth, naked to the waist, wearing only breeches, his hazel eyes blinking under a fringe of dark hark hair. He was about seventeen, with a face as sweet as a boy, but with the body of a young man forged by hard work." (p. 1)
When Luca was eleven his parents sent him to a monastery because they saw he was bright and wanted him to have an education. His parents were captured during an Ottoman raid when he was young and they are thought to be dead.

I really didn't like Luca. Which is unfortunate, since the majority of the story was told form his POV. I thought he was arrogant and immature, and for as smart as he was supposed to be he sure did seem pretty slow to catch on and clueless. Plus, as a character he was just boring.

I also didn't like the way he treated Freize, who was supposedly supposed to be his friend. He was rude to him and always seemed to be irritated with him.

Also, his opinion of women really irritated me. I know that it was the popular opinion of that time that men should be over women, but I just wanted to kick him in the crotch. 


Main Characters

  • Isolde
"Luca could not drag his eyes from this girl who had veiled her face from him and hooded her hair so that he should never know what she looked like. In the golden light of the rising sun he stared at her, seeing her for the first time, her dark blue eyes under brown upswinging brows, a straight, perfect nose, and a warm, tempting mouth... Luca realized that she was a beautiful thing of horror, the worst thing between heaven and hell: a fallen angel."
 Of course, Luca is just an idiot and Isolde isn't really a fallen angel. Though that sure would have made things more interesting.

We don't get to see much of the story from Isolde's POV, and for a large part of the book she's mostly in the background. I liked her far better than Luca, though, and thought she was a more interesting character.

She was strong, resilient, smart, and spirited. She is grieving the death of her father and has been tricked out of her inheritance by her complete ass of a brother and is now trapped in the nunnery. I felt sorry for her, and was cheering her on to find a way out of her circumstances.

I also liked the relationship between her and her friend, Ishraq. At least Isolde didn't treat her friend like crap, unlike Luca :P
     
  • Freize
"The abbot had been doubtful, but Freize had convinced him that his skills as a kitchen lad were so poor, and his love for adventure so strong, that he would better serve God by following a remarkable master on a secret quest ordained by the Pope himself than by burning bacon for the long-suffering monks." (p. 35)

At first Freize just got on my nerves, but he did grow on me throughout the book. He was quirky and witty, and didn't know when to keep his mouth shut. Sometimes though he was just plain annoying. I did like the relationship that developed between him and Ishraq later on, and his flirting was funny.


To Read Or Not To Read? 

 

 I was really looking forward to reading this book, but sadly it was disappointing. I had thought it was going to be a Historical Fantasy, with the description talking about "dark magic and werewolves", but it wasn't at all. All of the mysteries Luca faces can be rationally explained.

The plot started out interesting, but quickly lost my attention when it turned out to be very predictable. The character's didn't save the story either--they were all forgettable, and I wasn't really that attached to them.

The way this book is organized is also weird. There are no chapters, it just alternates POV between Luca and Isolde. I didn't like this, because I had no "resting place", no good place to stop where I could pick back up again.

The organization of the plot was also weird, and another thing that turned me off. I had thought the whole book was going to focus on the mystery about the nuns. Instead, a little more than half way though the mystery is solved and then the characters move on to another. It felt weird and choppy, and there was no sense of climax.


Overall, this book just didn't capture me like I hoped it would.

Writing: 3/5
Characters: 2/5
Plot: 2/5
Creativity/Originality: 2/5
Kept me interested: 2/5



Sunday, September 16, 2012

New Post Schedule (Mon., Wed., Fri.) and a Facebook Page!

Hello! I hope you are having a lovely Sunday :]

So I just wanted to post a quick update about a couple of changes.

First, I decided to get organized and create a posting schedule! Huzzah! Reviews will be posted on Mondays and Fridays, and my writing tip feature will be posted on Wednesdays.

I will probably post more frequently than 3 times a week (like participating in Top Ten Tuesday, or posting bookish news), but my main features will now be on a schedule.

Second, I have finally created a facebook page for Read. Write. Love. :D You can visit it here, and like it to stay up to date with my reviews, etc.

Also, I have added some cute social media icons for Goodreads, Twitter, and the new facebook page which I made myself, over to the right. Yay for organization!

Well, those were my accomplishments for the week :]

Have a great Sunday, and happy reading!


Friday, September 14, 2012

Feature Friday: What Hyped Up Book Wasn't Worth All the Talk?

Follow Friday is a meme hosted by Parajunkee and Alison Can Read.

This week's question is...

Q: What hyped up book do you think was not worth all the talk?

 

A: Vampire Academy by Richelle Mead






This book was so disappointing! From all of the raving reviews I was expecting so much more but instead I got a book full of shallow characters, teen drama, and an overdone 'badass' heroine.


For a better explanation of why I didn't like this book, here is my review from Goodreads:

I was extremely disappointed with this book. I had really high hopes that it would be amazing and I would love it based on its popularity and the high ratings, but after finishing I don't understand why it's so popular.

The concept about the different types of vampires and their guardians was interesting, and that's what led me to pick up this book. 


But the plot was focused more on high school drama than vampire action. Maybe if I were still in high school I would have enjoyed this book, but I'm not and I didn't like all of the drama, cliques, popularity crap, drinking, partying, swearing, shallow relationships, and sex. 

This is why I usually stay away from YA books that take place in a school setting. The plot was just weak and focused way too much on all of this instead of the interesting vampire concept that drew me in in the first place.

Next, the characters were just shallow and I didn't really feel connected to any of them. And Rose. Oh. My. Gosh. I couldn't stand her! It's extremely rare for me to hate a main character but I just couldn't like her. 


The author was trying to make her look tough and 'badass' but to me she just came across as an immature, shallow, jerk. She had a bad temper, was arrogant, slutty, was constantly wanting to beat someone up, and was just not a nice person. 

Oh, but she was so cool and badass because she swore and drank and beat people up and had a reputation as a slut *sarcasm*.

Here are a couple examples of why I couldn't stand her:

#1 Her friend, Mason, who she figures out has a crush on her, steps in to stand up for her from a couple of guys who are calling her dirty names and grabbing her ass. She can't retaliate cause she'll get kicked out of school. 


Mason steps in, punches one of the jerks in the face. Does she thank him? No. She complains about how she doesn't need him stepping in and saving her. Then she uses him by flirting with him knowing that he likes her but she doesn't feel the same, just so she can get him to deliver a message to another character which she could have delivered herself. 

Seriously??? Who treats their friends like that?? Especially after they just stood up for you!

Example #2 This line right here "He was boring, yes but safe. Just like Natalie. How come all the harmless people were so lame?" 


No one is cool enough for Rose Hathaway *eye roll*. She complains about how boring Natalie is and just picks her apart for no reason. At one point Rose describes Natalie's yellow dress as "clashing" with her black hair and how it didn't look good on her. What the heck?? Since when do black and yellow clash? Black is a neutral color, it doesn't clash with anything. And girls with dark hair look great in yellow dresses! 

It just bothered me how she treated everyone (even Mason who was supposed to be one of her friends) like crap, except for Lissa, and Dimitri, who she had a crush on.

I could go on about more reasons why I didn't like this character, but I'm just going to stop here. I'm not going to be reading any more of the Vampire Academy books, and I wouldn't recommend them. Maybe high schoolers will enjoy the drama and angst of Vampire Academy, but if you're in college like me then maybe not so much.



What was your hyped up book that didn't meet your expectations?


Thursday, September 13, 2012

Review: Pegasus: The Flame of Olympus by Kate O'Hearn

Title: Pegasus: The Flame of Olympus
Author: Kate O'Hearn
Pages: 400
Publisher: Aladdin
Series: Pegasus #1
Released: May 22, 2012

 













The Story

"It's really you isn't it?" Emily whispered softly as she stroked the soft muzzle. "You're Pegasus, aren't you?"
The stallion...nudged her hand, inviting another stroke. In that one rain-drenched instant, Emily felt her world changing. Forever. (p. 33)
One stormy night Pegasus crashes onto the roof of Emily's apartment in New York City. She soon learns that there is a war going on in Olympus and that the gods are being overthrown by the vicious, monstrous Nirads. These creatures have followed Pegasus to earth, along with a thief named Paelen who is after the stallion's golden bridle.

Emily must work together with a boy named Joel and the goddess Diana to return Pegasus to Olympus and defeat the Nirads before it is too late and both of their worlds are destroyed.


Our Heroine: Emily

"No!" Emily cried. "This is impossible!"
More lightning lit the rooftop, confirming what Emily was trying so hard to deny.
A white horse with golden hooves and vast white wings was lying on its side in the middle of her mother's rose garden. (p. 29)
 Emily was a sweet, caring girl and the relationship between her and Pegasus was really cute. My favorite part was when she brought him carrots and apples and a tub of ice cream for herself, and Pegasus ended up eating the ice cream. It was also sweet how protective Pegasus was of Emily.

However, while Emily did have likeable and sympathetic qualities (she is mourning the death of her mother), her character wasn't very developed. I also didn't feel like her character had changed at the end of the story as a result of her adventure. 


Our Villain: The Nirads

"Emily could see that the Nirad's eyes were jet-black with n o whites or color at all. Its teeth were large, sharp points, and it was drooling as it made ferocious, guttural sounds...it flexed its four arms, which ended in filthy hands and fingers with long, sharp claws." (p. 132)
The Nirads are the main villains of the story. They are four-armed monster warriors that appear to be indestructible and in the beginning of the story they have taken over Olympus.

They weren't really the best villains honestly. It's never explained where they came from, or what exactly they were after. With no motive, it felt like they were there just for the sake of the story having a villain.

Another villain of the story is a secret government agency called CRU, which researches strange phenomenon such as aliens and UFO's. They end up capturing one of the Olympians who accidentally came to earth with Pegasus early on, which leads to a series of interrogation scenes.

Basically the same questions and answers are repeated over and over and over to the point where it gets really annoying to read. The agents believe in aliens but refuse to accept that the Olympians could be real despite all the obvious evidence that continues to pile up (a winged horse, winged sandals, the toga).

I mean come on how thick could you be??


Main Characters


  • Paelen
"But Paelen had no intention of fighting. He wasn't a warrior. He was a thief with plans of his own, which didn't include getting killed in a battle they couldn't possibly win." (p. 2)
Paelen was probably one of the most interesting characters. He's a cowardly, selfish thief who accidentally follows Pegasus to earth. He wants to steal Pegasus's bridle for himself so he can control the stallion and leave Olympus because he feels like he doesn't belong.

He also has a talent for being able to escape any prison, because he can stretch his bones. I felt like Paelen was one of the character's who had more depth and who developed the most throughout the story.

  • Joel
"Finally someone came to mind. Someone from her school who would be strong enough to pull out the spear. Someone who was always sketching pictures of winged horses in his textbooks. The trouble was, he was the meanest boy in Emily's class. He was probably the meanest boy in the whole school." (p. 55)
Joel is an angry, troubled foster kid who Emily knows from school. I found it a bit unbelievable that she would go to him for help with Pegasus since she didn't know him at all he wasn't a very friendly person.

Joel had a bit more depth than most of the characters, and he also developed some throughout the story. He and Emily become friends, and the friendship between them was sweet.


To Read Or Not To Read? 

 The initial idea of this book is very intriguing, but in all honesty the writing needed a lot of work. The dialogue especially was very weak and awkward (and often cheesy), and a lot of times characters would state things to each other that they already knew solely for the reader's benefit. There was also lots of repetition of the same information.

I still enjoyed the story itself despite this, though it would have been much better had the writing been polished up. It was a fun, heartwarming, light read and I think that younger kids would really enjoy it.

I think though, with a younger audience in mind that this book should have been shorter because 400 pages can be daunting for younger readers, even if it is larger text that reads quickly.

All in all, a cute story!


Writing: 2/5
Characters: 2/5
Plot: 3/5
Creativity/Originality: 4/5
Kept me interested: 4/5



Wednesday, September 12, 2012

Bloggiesta 2012

So I've seen several posts about this thing called a Bloggiesta. My interest was piqued, so I had to check it out. Here's what I learned:

If you decide to participate you can expect:
  • to spend time that weekend (as much or as little as your schedule allows) working on your blog
  • to create a to do list to share on your blog and link up with other participants
  • to hopefully participant in several mini challenges and learn something new
  • to connect with other participants through blog hopping or twitter
  • to make new blogging friends!
  • to come away at the end of the three days with a spiffed up blog!

I'm down for all of that, so I signed up :] I'm still a little uncertain exactly what to expect (what is a mini challenge?) because I've never done anything like this before, but it sounds awesome!

I don't really have a to-do list exactly so much as few goals:
1. Learn everything I can so I don't feel like such a noob! haha
2. Make my blog better than it was before Bloggiesta.
3. Meet some awesome new bloggers :]

Are you participating? If you'd like to participate, Bloggiesta runs from September 28-30 and you can sign up at There's a Book.

Hope you're having a lovely Wednesday!


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